#Day_14 #Overview #Change
Task: The line chart showes the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.
My overview: β¬οΈ
Overall, job seekers accounted for the largest number of migrants over the timeframe, while the highest increase was observed in the number of peope pursuing education. The minority of survey participants reported that their motive was to visit their family or friends and take adventure. (Band 7.0)
Chat: Band 9.0 version
"Overall, the number of people moving for employment and study increased substantially from 2000 to 2015, with employment becoming the leading reason by the end of the period. In contrast, the figures for moving due to family/friends and adventure remained relatively stable, with adventure showing the smallest rise."
This focuses on key trends and avoids interpreting static features like this one as trends or increases over time.
Task: The line chart showes the results of a survey giving the reasons why people moved to the capital city of a particular country.
My overview: β¬οΈ
Overall, job seekers accounted for the largest number of migrants over the timeframe, while the highest increase was observed in the number of peope pursuing education. The minority of survey participants reported that their motive was to visit their family or friends and take adventure. (Band 7.0)
Chat: Band 9.0 version
"Overall, the number of people moving for employment and study increased substantially from 2000 to 2015, with employment becoming the leading reason by the end of the period. In contrast, the figures for moving due to family/friends and adventure remained relatively stable, with adventure showing the smallest rise."
This focuses on key trends and avoids interpreting static features like this one as trends or increases over time.