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⚛️ LINKING WORDS FOR COHESION

Linking words, also known as cohesive devices or simply connecting words, are the words that help you better connect ideas and make your language more fluent. Knowing linking words for IELTS is like having a powerful secret tool in your pocket that you can use to improve your score. Linking words ielts linking words and cohesive devices, on missing puzzle piece If you show that you can effectively use linking words in the IELTS writing and speaking test, it will help you boost your score. It is worth learning linking words since this is the easiest way to raise your IELTS band score to the next level.

🔃 ADDING INFORMATION
• Again, equally, in fact, also, furthermore, moreover, and, in addition
(to...), and then, indeed, what is more, besides;

🔃 COMPARING
• Besides, still, but, nevertheless, whereas, however, while, in contrast, on
the contrary, yet, instead, on the other hand;

🔃 ORDERING INFORMATION
• first(ly), (second(ly)), last, on top of (that), finally, next, to (begin with),
in the (first) place, more important, then;

🔃 CAUSE AND EFFECT
• as a result, for this reason, thus, because the, then, consequently,
therefore, thereupon.

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TESOL Standards

Sizda IELTS bor — lekin ish topa olmayabsizmi?

Biz sizga yordam beramiz.

Seminarga keling va o'qituvchilikni o'rganing.

Seminar Mavzulari


1. Mavzu 1
2. Mavzu 2
3. Mavzu 3
4. Mavzu 4
5. Mavzu 5


Seminar Foydalari


1. Foyda 1
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🔔 Ideas about "Television, Internet, Phones"

➡️ Opinions about Television
🏷 Television has many benefits.
🏷 However, it can be addictive.
🏷 Children should play outside rather than sit in front of a screen all day.
🏷 Behaviour shown on TV can influence people.
🏷 Parents should choose carefully what their children watch.
🏷 Children should not be exposed to violence, swearing or sexual images.
🏷 Advertising during children’s programmes should be strictly controlled.
🏷 TV companies should make more positive, educational programmes.

➡️ Positives of the Internet
🏷 There are many advantages to using the Internet.
🏷 It gives us instant access to information on almost any subject.
🏷 Shops and other services are now available online.
🏷 People can buy goods and services from the comfort of their homes.
🏷 The Internet is starting to replace other forms of entertainment.
🏷 It has revolutionised communication.
🏷 We can keep in touch by e-mail or instant messenger services.
🏷 Video messaging is becoming common for business meetings.

➡️ Negatives of the Internet
🏷 Many websites contain offensive content.
🏷 Some sites show violent or sexual images.
🏷 Parents find it difficult to control what their children see online.
🏷 They do not always know who their children are chatting to.
🏷 With so many websites it is difficult to search for good information.
🏷 Criminals increasingly use the Internet to steal people’s money.

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🔔 Useful Vocabulary & Expressions of #Essay311

〰️ exploitation: the use of land, oil, minerals, etc
Example: commercial exploitation of the mineral resources in Antarctica

〰️ waste disposal: the act of getting rid of sth

〰️ plant: a factory
Example: a chemical plant

〰️ utilise: to use something, especially for a practical purpose
Example: The Romans were the first to utilise concrete as a building material.

〰️ solar energy: radiant energy emitted by the sun.

〰️ consumption of electricity: the amount of electrical energy used over a specific period.

〰️ fossil: the remains or impression of a prehistoric plant or animal embedded in rock and preserved in petrified form.

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— Ideas for "Television, Internet, Phones" 👌
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☘️ Opinion

Q: Development in technology has brought various environmental problems. Some believe that people need to live simpler lives to solve environmental problems. Others, however, believe technology is the way to solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

💡 Answer:

The improvements in technology currently bring about harmful effects on the environment. While some people believe having simpler lives is the only solution, I would argue that technological advances can help to tackle these environmental problems.

On the one hand, it is believed that individuals need to live simple lives and rely less on technology. The first suggestion is that people should walk or cycle rather than drive cars. This is because the current number of cars being manufactured and used is increasing, which causes high levels of exhaust fumes and makes air pollution become serious. Additionally, people should try to reduce their consumption of electricity so that the exploitation of natural resources such as fossil fuels or nuclear power can be minimised. An example of this idea is the annual event called Earth Hour where everyone is asked to turn their lights off for sixty minutes.

On the other hand, I believe the developments of technology can greatly contribute to environmental protection. Firstly, because of those improvements, people are able to come up with ways to recycle materials such as paper or glass, which reduces the problem of waste disposal. Secondly, technology can also help to create electricity using renewable resources. For example, many countries in the world have built plants that utilise solar energy to generate power. As a result, it is not necessary to rely on non-renewable resources, and people can create electricity without significantly damaging the environment.

In conclusion, while some people think that they should live simpler lives to prevent environmental issues, I would argue that these problems can be dealt with by technological improvements.

✍️ Total words: 270

📍Band: 7.0+

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🔖 Change Yourself and not The World

Long ago, people lived happily under the rule of a king. The people of the kingdom were very happy as they led a very prosperous life with an abundance of wealth and no misfortunes.

Once, the king decided to go visiting places of historical importance and pilgrim centres at distant places. He decided to travel by foot to interact with his people. People of distant places were very happy to have a conversation with their king. They were proud that their king had a kind heart.

After several weeks of travel, the king returned to the palace. He was quite happy that he had visited many pilgrim centres and witnessed his people leading a prosperous life. However, he had one regret.

He had intolerable pain in his feet as it was his first trip by foot covering a long distance. He complained to his ministers that the roads weren't comfortable and that they were very stony. He could not tolerate the pain. He said that he was very much worried about the people who had to walk along those roads as it would be painful for them too!

Considering all this, he ordered his servants to cover the roads in the whole country with leather so that the people of his kingdom can walk comfortably.

The king's ministers were stunned to hear his order as it would mean that thousands of cows would have to be slaughtered in order to get sufficient quantity of leather. And it would cost a huge amount of money also.

Finally, a wise man from the ministry came to the king and said that he had another idea. The king asked what the alternative was. The minister said, "Instead of covering the roads with leather, why don't you just have a piece of leather cut in appropriate shape to cover your feet?"

The king was very much surprised by his suggestion and applauded the wisdom of the minister. He ordered a pair of leather shoes for himself and requested all his countrymen also to wear shoes.

📝 Moral: Instead of trying to change the world, we should try to change ourselves.

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📈 Test day - some helpful IELTS tips

1. Get a good night's sleep
Make sure that you get enough rest the night before the IELTS test. Tiredness will directly affect your ability to concentrate.

2. Eat breakfast
Eat a good meal before the exam. Your brain definitely functions better when you’re not hungry.

3. Wear comfortable clothes
Wear appropriate clothing that won’t distract you from concentrating on the exam. Don’t wear clothes that are too tight, and consider the fact that the exam room might be cold or warm so dress in layers.

4. Take a soda to the exam hall
You are allowed to take a transparent bottle of water, pencil, eraser and passport to the exam hall. But instead of water, you can also take a bottle of soda to keep your awareness and blood sugar high as it contains both caffeine and sugar.

5. Pay attention to spelling & punctuation
Spelling and punctuation are very important throughout the entire IELTS test and you’ll lose points if your answers are spelled incorrectly or you use punctuation incorrectly.

6. Pay attention to the word limits
Keep in mind that you will lose marks if you exceed the word limits. So pay attention to where the answers should be “not more than three words”, as well as the writing tasks, which should be 250 and 150 words.

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⭐️ Map of The Model Essays

🖥 Essay 1 - 10 🖥 Essay 11 - 20
🖥 Essay 21 - 30 🖥 Essay 31 - 40
🖥 Essay 41 - 50 🖥 Essay 51 - 60
🖥 Essay 61 - 70 🖥 Essay 71 - 80
🖥 Essay 81 - 90 🖥 Essay 91 - 100
🖥 Essay 101 - 110

📌 Essay 111: t is impossible to help all people around the world in need so governments should focus on people from their own countries. What extent do you agree or disagree?

📌 Essay 112: Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

📌 Essay 113: Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that other media are better sources of news. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

📌 Essay 115: There are several benefits for youngsters who travel to foreign countries. Do you agree or disagree?

📌 Essay 116: In some places, money earned from tourism has become an important part of the economy. What are the advantages and disadvantages of relying on tourism as a major source of revenue?

📌 Essay 117: In many countries, crime rates among younger people have been rising in recent years. What are the causes of this, and what are the possible solutions?

📌 Essay 118: International tourism is now more common than ever before, some feel that this is a positive trend, while others do not.

📌 Essay 119: In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. Do the advantages of this new approach outweigh the disadvantages?

📌 Essay 120: In the past, most people lived in small villages where everyone knew everyone else. Nowadays, most people live in large cities where they only know a few people in their area. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community?

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🔔 Useful Vocabulary & Expressions of #310

〰️ To struggle: to give something officially to somebody/something for a particular purpose
Example: They struggled just to pay their bills.

〰️ To commit crime: to do something wrong or illegal
Example: Most crimes are committed by young men.

〰️ To diminish smth: to become or to make something become smaller, weaker, etc.
Example: The world's resources are rapidly diminishing.

〰️ Incentive: something that encourages you to do something.
Example: There is no incentive for people to save fuel.

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🔔 Ideas about "Television, Internet, Phones"

➡️ Positives of Television
🏷 Watching television is a good way to relax.
🏷 It is many people’s favourite way to wind down after a hard day at work.
🏷 Television programmes can be entertaining and enjoyable.
🏷 Viewers have access to a huge variety of entertainment channels.
🏷 Television brings the best comedians, musicians and actors into our homes.
🏷 Programmes can also be informative and educational.
🏷 News coverage makes the public aware of events around the world.
🏷 Documentaries can make learning more interesting.

➡️ Negatives of Television
🏷 Television is having a negative impact on society.
🏷 Some people link violence on television with crime rates in the real world.
🏷 Children copy the behaviour they see on the screen.
🏷 Children are less healthy because they spend less time playing.
🏷 Advertisers direct their marketing at children.
🏷 Most programmes do not require much thought.
🏷 Watching TV is a waste of time.

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☘️ Agree / Disagree

Q: Nowadays, more and more older people who need employment compete with the younger people for the same jobs. What problems this causes? What are solutions?

💡 Answer:

It is true that there has been increasingly more competition between the young and the old who are in search of the same job. Although there will undoubtedly be some negative consequences of this trend, steps can be taken to mitigate these potential problems.

As more elderly applicants have to compete with the younger ones for a job, several related problems can be anticipated. The main issue is that this will obviously pose more challenges for the young who are struggling to find a place in the labour market. Older people, understandably, are usually given more favourable consideration by recruiters due to their vast experience in comparison with the young generation, which can lead to a shortage of work for younger people, increasing the rates of unemployment. Furthermore, when being unemployed and lacking a stable source of income, people are likely to commit crimes such as robbery to feed themselves and their family. As a result, not only will the citizens’ quality of life diminish, but their safety will also be threatened.

However, there are several actions that governments could take to solve the problems described above. Firstly, decreasing the legal retirement age can alleviate the pressure of competition the young have to take. Secondly, increasing the state pension is also an ideal option for this issue because some retirees who find their pension sufficient for living will not have to return to work. Finally, governments can create more available jobs by attracting international organizations to invest with additional incentives.

In conclusion, various measures can be taken to tackle the problems that are certain to arise as older people are competing with the young for the same job.

✍️ Total words: 278

📍Band: 7.5+

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🔖 The Wise Investment

In a village, there lived two friends, Tom and Jerry. Tom was not very wise. Jerry possessed good wisdom. One day, the two set out for the market in the nearby village to do some shopping. On reaching the market place, they were delighted to see the items for sale on display, There were sweets, clothes, utensils, toys, birds and pets on sale.

As they moved about, they caught sight of parrots. The two decided to buy some parrots, as they were very fond of birds. They enquired about the price from the seller. The seller said, “These parrots are rupees fifty each, and those others are rupees five thousand each”.

The two friends asked the seller, “Why this difference in the prices? The seller replied,” The ones the cost rupees fifty each are not Wise. They can’t be taught Or trained to do anything. The costlier ones are wise, and can learn many things.”

Tom, who was not very wise, decided to buy ten of the cheaper parrots , while Jerry, the wiser one, decided to buy just one parrot of the costlier variety. Tom said to Jerry, “Don’t be a fool. This one parrot will cost you rupees five thousand, while ten of the cheaper parrots will cost you rupees five hundred only! If you buy the cheaper variety, you will not only have more parrots, but will also save some handsome amount of money!

Jerry listened to Tom patiently and simply smiled, without saying anything. The two, then, made their purchases and left. The next day, Jerry started teaching his parrot. Soon, his parrot, a wise fellow, was well trained. On the other hand, Tom tried hard to teach his parrots, but they would not learn anything. One day, Jerry let his parrot fly away. After a few hours, his parrot, the wise one, returned with the ten parrots of Tom. Tom had lost all his parrots. Jerry had eleven parrots now, whereas Tom was left with none.

📝 THE MORAL: One wise investment is better than ten foolish investments. Wise investments fetch good fortune while unwise investments bring misfortune.

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📈 8 Tips for Improving Your Writing Style

To be a better writer, you need to know how to be direct and clear, while also putting your own stamp on your writing. Follow these eight writing tips for improving your style:

1️⃣ Be direct in your writing: Good writing is clear and concise. Lose filler words, like unnecessary adverbs and prepositional phrases, simply take up space and weigh a sentence down. Say exactly what you mean in the most direct way.

2️⃣ Choose your words wisely: There are many ways to write a sentence, and there are different words you can choose to convey the same idea. Always choose the simpler of two words. Use familiar vocabulary instead of lofty words from the English language. Simple words are more direct and easier for all readers to understand. Use a thesaurus if you need a little help finding a replacement or an easier way to say something.

3️⃣ Short sentences are more powerful than long sentences: A story loses steam with wordiness. Short sentences are easier to comprehend, something that readers appreciate. Avoid trying to pack too much into a line. Every sentence should contain one thought or idea.

4️⃣ Write short paragraphs: Keep your paragraphs short and manageable. Each one should consist of sentences that support the same idea. Short paragraphs are easier to digest. They also create a more visually appealing layout on the page. Academic writing often consists of lengthier paragraphs, as they need more information to support each theme. In less formal writing, shorter paragraphs are the norm.

5️⃣ Always use the active voice: Use the active voice and adhere to subject-verb-object sentence structure. It’s the most direct path to making your point. With the active voice, the subject is doing something, which is more exciting than the passive voice, in which something is being done to the subject. The passive voice might be grammatically correct, but it creates long, complex sentences and is a weaker way of presenting information.

6️⃣ Review and edit your work: Proofreading your first draft should be the first step in your editing process before you hand your story over to a professional editor. Tighten your writing, check your word choice and sentence structure, and hone your voice to improve your style.

7️⃣ Use a natural, conversational tone: Your writing style relies on your own, unique voice. Communicate in your comfort zone. In other words, write like you converse. Shape ideas with your original thoughts and voice, and do your best to avoid clichés. Your writing style should reflect your personality.

8️⃣ Read famous authors: Pick up any book by Mark Twain, and you’ll know it’s his writing simply by the tone of the story and the words he uses. Great writers put a stamp on their writing with a signature style. Along with works of fiction, read Strunk and White’s famous style guide The Elements of Style. Learning how other writers create their style. Then do the same with your own writing.

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🔖 Phrasal Verbs with "take"

Here is a list with some examples of the most common phrasal verbs
with "take". Use this glossary to complete exercises at the end of this
chapter.

〰️ Take aback: Surprise or shock
⬇️ Example: It took me aback when she asked such a personal question.

〰️ Take after: To have similar appearance, character or personality
to an older family member
⬇️Example: She takes after her father.

〰️ Take against: Stop liking someone; to become hostile toward
⬇️ Example: She took against Mary when she was promoted over her.

〰️ Take apart: Separate something into its parts
⬇️ Example: The mechanic took the car apart to find the problem.

〰️ Take aside: Get someone alone to talk to them
⬇️ Example: John was taken aside by the manager when he shouted at a customer.

〰️ Take away: Remove something and put it in a different place
⬇️ Example: My dad took our plates away and came back with chocolate
cake for dessert!

〰️ Take away: Remove something, either material or abstract, so that a person no longer has it
⬇️ Example: Jack´s mum took his computer away until he improved at school.

〰️ Take away: Subtract or diminish something
⬇️ Example: If I have three oranges and I take away two, how many oranges do I have left? The answer is …. one.

〰️ Take away: Leave a memory or impression in one’s mind that you think about later
⬇️ Example: I took away the impression that the manager did not get along with his players.

〰️ Take away: Force someone to leave a place and take him or her somewhere else
⬇️ Example: The police took the suspect to the station for
questioning.

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🔔 Ideas about "Sport and Leisure"

➡️ Arguments for Competitive Sport
🏷 Competition is a natural instinct in humans.
🏷 In daily life we compete to get jobs or the highest grades.
🏷 Sports are a safe form of competition.
🏷 Competition is healthy because it pushes us to give our best.
🏷 Competitors and fans can release energy and aggression.
🏷 Supporters of teams feel a sense of belonging to a community.

➡️ Opinion: professional sport salaries are too high
🏷 Sports professionals earn too much money.
🏷 They do not provide a vital service.
🏷 Football players, for example, earn enormous salaries by simply kicking a ball.
🏷 We could all live happily without professional football.
🏷 Life would be difficult without doctors, engineers and other vital professionals.
🏷 Society does not seem to value these professions as highly as professional sport.
🏷 Sports salaries should be compatible with the wages most people earn.

➡️ Opinion: professional sport salaries are fair
🏷 It is fair that the best professionals earn a lot of money.
🏷 Sport is a multi-million-pound industry.
🏷 There is a large audience of sports fans.
🏷 Sports on television attract many viewers.
🏷 Sports stars have dedicated hours of practice to developing their fitness and skills.
🏷 Only the most talented among them will reach the top.
🏷 A sports career may only last 10 years.
🏷 Sports fans are willing to pay to support their teams.

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☘️ Line graph

✅ Q:
The graph below gives information about changes in the birth and death in New Zealand between 1901 and 2101. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

💡 Answer:

The line graph shows the historical and predicted trends for the rate of birth and mortality in New Zealand for the period from 1901 through to 2101.

At the start of the review period, the birth rate surpasses the mortality rate. The forecasted data shows that the mortality rate is likely to exceed the birth rate by 2041, at which point, the large gap between the two will level off.

At the beginning of the period, the birth rate started at 20,000, peaking at around 66,000 in 1961, before fluctuating between 50,000 and 65,000 until 2021. It is anticipated to decline to around 45,000 births by 2101 slowly.

In contrast, the mortality rate started at just below 10,000 in 1901 and steadily rose throughout, reaching around 30,000 in 2021. This increase is expected to accelerate between 2021 and 2041 when the number of deaths will surpass the number of births. By 2051 the death rate will stabilize at around 60,000 and decline marginally until the end of the period.

✍️ Total words: 169

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