Mukhammad Amin | W7.5

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You all know that ninety-nine times out of a hundred, I write task 2 essays that exceed 300 words, and sometimes even reach 400 words, to maximize my chances of scoring higher, especially in Grammatical Range and Accuracy (GRA) and Task Response (TR) criteria. As sweet as this essay is, I do not recommend you write a short essay, particularly in Task 2; I have a strong gut feeling that writing that kind of essay is going to be very difficult for you to get a high score. The reason is simple: the more words you write, the more opportunities you have to demonstrate your grammar and vocabulary, which can give the examiner the impression that you are a higher-level candidate and above average.

As for this essay, I wrote it after reading a very nice sample written by a brilliant candidate. If I had this topic in my real exam, I would never write a short essay; this was merely an experiment.

Some say that reading newspapers and watching TV news is a waste of time, because it has no direct connection with people’s lives.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people claim that consuming news through newspapers and television is futile because it has little relevance to daily life. However, I disagree with this notion, as both activities offer valuable information and entertainment.

First and foremost, newspapers serve as a valuable alternative to books, offering distinct perspectives on global affairs. When people read newspapers provided by world-renowned publications like The New York Times, Time, and The Economist, they acquire reliable information on current events, both locally and globally, which helps them stay informed. Furthermore, these providers’ professional editors present content about diverse topics ranging from economics to geopolitics in an engaging and thought-provoking way, improving readers’ language skills. Despite not having a direct impact on individuals’ daily lives, newspapers remain a valuable source of knowledge, much like books.
 
Similarly, watching television offers not only entertainment but also educational value. Thanks to a wide array of programs, from major sporting events like the FIFA World Cup, a high-profile global tournament, to Hollywood movies, this small screen caters to diverse interests. Additionally, certain shows, such as cooking or wildlife documentaries, provide essential knowledge that can be put into practice in real life. As a result, TV is more than just a leisure activity—it can also contribute to personal growth.

To conclude, both newspapers and television have significant benefits, especially in terms of offering knowledge, entertainment, and even skill development. Although their connection to everyday life may not always be direct, dismissing them as a waste of time overlooks their broader value.

Words: 250. 👑
Potential score: 8.0 – 8/8/8/8. 💎
Written on Jan 30, 2025. 🗓

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Finally, the British Council (BC) has confirmed that my certificate has been sent via courier and will arrive soon! Can’t wait to get it in my hands! Probably next week. 🥶

Look at the highlighted words. They make this essay too mechanical, which leads to a band 5.0 or even 4.0 for CC.

Source: UpScore.ai

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The table illustrates the top-grossing movies worldwide, ranked by their lifetime earnings in US dollars, along with their respective release years.

Overall, Avatar is the highest-grossing film of all time, with Avengers: Endgame following closely as a runner-up. It is also clear that modern blockbusters dominate the list, whereas Titanic is the only entry from the 20th century. Additionally, Inside Out 2 is the most recent film to secure a position among the highest earners.

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BAND 9 OVERVIEW BY ME

The table details the variations in the number of band scores achieved by students at the IELTS ZONE learning center between January and July 2019.

In general, a band score of 6.5 was by far the most popular among students, with the majority achieving this score, whereas other scores were significantly less common. Additionally, as the scores increased, the number of students attaining those higher scores declined over time.

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This is a very cool sentence structure that can be used when making relevant comparisons, especially in Task 1. 📈💎

X + verb + Y whose + noun, though adjective, to be…

The number of vegetables produced in the US increased substantially, surpassing its counterparts whose growth, though noticeable, was significantly less pronounced.

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Pay special attention to the underlined words in this first detailed paragraph. It is language features like these that raise your CC score to 9.0. I'm sure I've done exceptionally well in CC and met all the requirements for band 9.

Requirements of Band 9 Coherence & Cohesion: ⬇

✔ The message can be followed effortlessly.
✔ Cohesion is used in such a way that it very rarely attracts attention.
✔ Any lapses in coherence or cohesion are minimal.
✔ Paragraphing is skilfully managed.

Now you get it, right? If I hadn’t underlined those words, it would have been difficult to find them, meaning cohesion rarely attracts attention.

In some societies, sports and entertainment figures are more valued than professionals such as doctors and teachers.

Why is this the case, and do you consider it a positive or negative trend?

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Date: Today, February 13, 2025. 🗓

We are now living in a world of unprecedented transformations and shifting social norms, where it has become increasingly common for athletes and entertainers to be held in higher regard than other experts like physicians and tutors, particularly in modern societies. While there are several reasons why this is taking place, I believe that it represents a negative development.

There are a variety of factors that can be attributed to this situation. With an exponential growth in digital technology, constant social media presence, celebrity culture, and high-profile endorsements, sports, and entertainment figures have gained unparalleled visibility, which has significantly contributed to their elevated status in society. Considering these circumstances, it comes as no wonder that these days, sporting icons and entertainment moguls are more esteemed than other specialists in the fields of medicine and teaching. A striking example is Cristiano Ronaldo, a professional football player, who, through his remarkable success on the field and his massive social media following, has become a global icon, reaching a level of fame and recognition that far surpasses that of many highly respected professionals.

I, however, believe that this trend does more harm than good. If athletes and celebrities are given greater prominence, their counterparts – clinicians and pedagogues – significantly trail/lag behind them in terms of not only fame but also public recognition, which leads to a lack of appreciation for these individuals’ essential roles. As a consequence of such glorification, the young generation follows athletic figures and showbiz personalities, neglecting the significance of medical staff and educators, whose contributions are critical/essential/indispensable to society's well-being and development. At a time when the vast majority of teenagers across the globe struggle to juggle multiple academic assignments, find it difficult to strike a balance between studies and family, and are bombarded with endless streams of reels, admiring sportspeople and entertainment elites at the expense of healthcare professionals and mentors might exacerbate these existing problems.

To conclude, while the rise in prominence of professional athletes and entertainment figures is undoubtedly a product of modern media and technological advancements, I contend that this trend undermines the value placed on professionals in fields like medicine and education, thereby making the younger generation less interested in pursuing careers in medicine and teaching, which are vital to society’s long-term well-being.

Words: 378, 35 minutes. 🚀
Potential score: 8.0 – 9/8/8/8. 💎
Checked by Dilshodbek (W8.5).

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