#Day_15 #Overview #Plans
Task: The plans show the changes that have taken place in a bookstore.
My overview: ⬇️
Overall, despite the reshuffle, all sections are still functioning. Of a particular note, the bookstore has become more visitor-friendly at the expense of introducing a cafe and several tables.
Chat: 7.5.
➡️Improvements Needed:
Slight lack of precision regarding the reshuffle (which areas changed and how).
The phrase "all sections are still functioning" is somewhat vague and could be more specific.
➡️Grammar and Precision Check
"Of a particular note" → should be "Of particular note."
"at the expense of introducing a cafe and several tables" → The phrase implies a negative consequence, which might not fit well here. Consider a neutral or positive tone.
➡️Objectively Interpreted Version
"Overall, the bookstore has undergone a significant reorganization, with the addition of a café and seating area being the most notable change, making it more inviting for visitors."
Task: The plans show the changes that have taken place in a bookstore.
My overview: ⬇️
Overall, despite the reshuffle, all sections are still functioning. Of a particular note, the bookstore has become more visitor-friendly at the expense of introducing a cafe and several tables.
Chat: 7.5.
➡️Improvements Needed:
Slight lack of precision regarding the reshuffle (which areas changed and how).
The phrase "all sections are still functioning" is somewhat vague and could be more specific.
➡️Grammar and Precision Check
"Of a particular note" → should be "Of particular note."
"at the expense of introducing a cafe and several tables" → The phrase implies a negative consequence, which might not fit well here. Consider a neutral or positive tone.
➡️Objectively Interpreted Version
"Overall, the bookstore has undergone a significant reorganization, with the addition of a café and seating area being the most notable change, making it more inviting for visitors."