#Day_3 #Overview #Change
Me: Overall, the number of patients increased in three out of four clinics, albeit at different levels, with the eye clinic seeing substantial growth. Birth control clinic, however, had fluctuations by the end of the period when the figure ended at its initial level. (8.0)
Chat: Overall, patient numbers increased in three out of four clinics, with the eye clinic experiencing the most significant growth. Meanwhile, the birth control clinic showed fluctuations and ultimately returned to its initial figure by the end of the period. (9.0)
The revised version of your overview is Band 9.0 material because it:
✅ Summarizes key trends concisely.
✅ Maintains objectivity without assumptions.
✅ Uses precise and natural academic language.
✅ Demonstrates excellent grammar and coherence.
Me: Overall, the number of patients increased in three out of four clinics, albeit at different levels, with the eye clinic seeing substantial growth. Birth control clinic, however, had fluctuations by the end of the period when the figure ended at its initial level. (8.0)
Chat: Overall, patient numbers increased in three out of four clinics, with the eye clinic experiencing the most significant growth. Meanwhile, the birth control clinic showed fluctuations and ultimately returned to its initial figure by the end of the period. (9.0)
The revised version of your overview is Band 9.0 material because it:
✅ Summarizes key trends concisely.
✅ Maintains objectivity without assumptions.
✅ Uses precise and natural academic language.
✅ Demonstrates excellent grammar and coherence.