Tohir Isroilov | IELTS 8.0

😱Open Ai 01 is awesome!

I asked the latest and greatest version of ChatGPT how I can improve my income, here's the response:

🤖Chat-GPT(01)- To improve your income, implement these structured steps:

💵Set Financial Goals:

Define income goals for the next 3, 6, and 12 months. Track all income and expenses closely to understand your baseline, and review weekly. Use apps like Mint or spreadsheets to automate tracking.

💵Invest in Skill-Building:

Research high-demand skills relevant to your field or new income sources. Select one skill and commit 1-2 hours daily to learning through platforms like Udemy or Coursera. Consistent study will build marketable expertise over time.

💱Develop a Side Income Stream:

Identify a side path based on your skills (freelancing, online business, consulting). Choose one platform, such as Fiverr, Etsy, or Upwork, to build a portfolio, and spend 1-2 hours daily on side income tasks, including client outreach, portfolio development, and marketing.

🤵Network and Find a Mentor:

Make professional connections on LinkedIn, aiming for at least three new contacts weekly. Look for industry events, both online and offline, to build connections, and seek a mentor if possible. A monthly mentor check-in can provide guidance and accountability.

💻Track Progress and Adjust:

Monitor income increases monthly. Conduct a detailed review every quarter to adjust strategies, focus, and goals as needed. Celebrate small wins to stay motivated.

💡With these steps, consistent effort in skill development, networking, and building side income will steadily increase your income over time.


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📈Some people think that competition at work, at school and in daily life is a good thing. Others believe that we should try to cooperate more, rather than competing against each other. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, some individuals argued that competition among pupils and employees at teaching centers, at work and in daily life is very highly effective. However, others lean more towards partnership rather than contesting with each other. In my opinion, working together is the most effective way to ascending our knowledge. In this essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of competition.

On the one hand, competition can be very beneficial. When students and employees adopt a competitive mindset, it motivates them to work harder and strive for improvement. This drive can help them achieve higher levels of performance and set ambitious goals. For example, in schools, competition can encourage students to improve their grades, and in workplaces, it can inspire employees to exceed expectations and gain recognition. Additionally, competition often promotes innovation, as people strive to create new ideas and solutions to stand out from their peers.

On the other hand, while competition has its benefits, it can also bring about negative consequences, such as stress and reduced teamwork. Constantly competing can lead to burnout, as individuals feel pressured to outperform others, which may harm their overall well-being. Collaboration, in contrast, allows individuals to share their knowledge and work together toward a common goal, which fosters a more supportive environment. In academic settings, group work enables students to learn from each other, and in workplaces, teamwork encourages employees to tackle complex tasks more efficiently. This cooperative approach not only enhances learning but also builds strong interpersonal relationships.

In conclusion, although competition can motivate individuals to strive for success and foster innovation, it can also result in stress and hinder genuine learning. Collaboration, on the other hand, promotes sustainable growth and supports a healthier learning environment. Therefore, while competition has its merits, I believe that working together is the most effective way to expand knowledge and build lasting success.

🔗Essay by Diyorbek, one of my current students in an IELTS group

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-How can I get 9.0 on the listening section❓

✔️My answer:

❗️To get that top score, you need to focus only on two things, nothing more, nothing less.

🔴 Number one is improving your comprehension to the best level possible, which means you should do so much listening in English until you reach a level where you do not have any difficulty understanding a native speaker level language - be it in American pronunciation or British or any other pronunciation from an english-speaking country.

🔴Number two - this second one has nothing to do with doing the listening test or understanding different pronunciations. This one can be called as "sharp concentration". Simply being able to maintain your full concentration throughout the test is the next most important thing.

💯 That's it. Band 9 will be yours.

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"...For example, more exercise can fit in their daily routine along with better relaxation, which, in turn, results in greater efficiency and productivity at the workplace..."

Suggested Revision: For example, with more time for relaxation, employees can incorporate more exercise into their daily routine, leading to increased efficiency and productivity at work.

Explanation: The revised sentence is more clear and natural, and the word choice is more precise.

"...Such questions may not have positive answers, and probably because of that most government or private employers are not prepared yet..."

Suggested Revision: Such questions may not have positive answers, and for that reason, most government or private employers are not ready yet.

Explanation: The revised sentence is more clear and natural, and the word choice is more precise.

Task Response - 8.0
Summary
The essay addresses the task effectively, presenting a clear position throughout the response. The arguments are well-developed and supported with relevant examples. However, the introduction could be more engaging and the conclusion could be more comprehensive.

Suggestions
Consider using a more engaging hook in your introduction to grab the reader's attention.
Provide a more comprehensive summary of your arguments in the conclusion.



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Professional feedback:

Overall 8.0


Cohesion and Coherence - 8.0
Summary
The essay is logically organized and ideas are connected well. The introduction and conclusion are clear and relevant. However, there are a few instances where the flow of ideas could be improved.

Suggestions
Try to use a wider range of linking words to connect your ideas.
Ensure that your arguments are presented in a clear and logical order.
Revisions
"...On the one hand, a slight decline in the number of days on which we have to commute to work might be greatly advantageous as it entails enhances in productivity as well as work-life balance..."

Suggested Revision: On the one hand, a reduction in the number of work days could be highly beneficial, as it would lead to increased productivity and a better work-life balance.

Explanation: The revised sentence is more concise and clear.

"...On the other hand, I believe we have to take several key points into account before making such a huge decision as the system are not ready for this..."

Suggested Revision: On the other hand, we must consider several key points before implementing such a significant change, as the current system is not ready for it.

Explanation: The revised sentence is more clear and concise, and the grammar is correct.

"...In conclusion, even though having a shorter business week sounds exciting as it brings multiple benefits especially to the employees, I believe the majority of companies are still unprepared to change in such a drastic way..."

Suggested Revision: In conclusion, although a shorter work week may seem appealing and offer numerous benefits, I believe most companies are not ready to make such a drastic change.

Explanation: The revised sentence is more clear and concise, and the grammar is correct.

Grammatical range and accuracy - 8.0
Summary
The essay uses a wide range of complex structures. However, there are a few grammatical errors and awkward constructions.

Revisions
"...On the one hand, a slight decline in the number of days on which we have to commute to work might be greatly advantageous as it entails enhances in productivity as well as work-life balance..."

Suggested Revision: On the one hand, a slight decrease in the number of work days could be greatly advantageous as it would lead to increased productivity and work-life balance.

Explanation: The revised sentence corrects the grammatical error and is more natural and clear.

"...For instance, if we had a shorter business week tomorrow, how much work should now be required from each employee?.."

Suggested Revision: For instance, if we were to have a shorter work week starting tomorrow, how much work should be required from each employee?

Explanation: The revised sentence corrects the grammatical error and is more natural and clear.

"...How about from the managers, what do we need to do to keep making the same amount of profits even after this modification in the system?.."

Suggested Revision: What about the managers? What do we need to do to maintain the same level of profitability after this system modification?

Explanation: The revised sentence corrects the grammatical error and is more natural and clear.

Lexical Resource - 8.0
Summary
The essay uses a wide range of vocabulary and there is evidence of less common and idiomatic language. However, there are a few instances of awkward or incorrect word choice.

Revisions
"...Obviously, although this change could provide its benefits as staff members become more mentally and physically fresh after resting for a longer period, I believe we are yet not ready to make the switch..."

Suggested Revision: Clearly, although this change could benefit staff members who may feel more mentally and physically refreshed after a longer period of rest, I believe we are not yet ready to make the switch.

Explanation: The revised sentence is more clear and natural, and the word choice is more precise.

✅IELTS Speaking Part 2: main topics
For part 2 of IELTS speaking, I encourage my students in Manchester to prepare ideas for 6 main topic areas:

🩵Describe an object (a gift, something you use etc.)
🩵Describe a person (someone you admire, a family member etc.)
🩵Describe an event (a festival, celebration etc.)
🩵Describe an activity (e.g. a hobby)
🩵Describe a place (somewhere you visited, a holiday etc.)
🩵Describe your favourite (book/film/advertisement/website)

🟣Most questions fit into one of these topics. For example, "Describe a river, lake or sea which you like" is number 5 - you could describe a holiday by the sea, or a city with a river.

💜Don't take the test without preparing some ideas for these topics first!

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#reading #truefalsenotgiven

Urban farming is not, of course, a new phenomenon. Inner-city agriculture is booming from Shanghai to Detroit and Tokyo to Bangkok. Strawberries are being grown in disused shipping
containers, mushrooms in underground carparks.

#offtopic

I never believed the notion that people could betray others just for the sake of earning some money.

However, working at SMART LC with people from different walks of life, hiring the ones belonging to both the younger and older generation has taught me the reverse is actually more frequent.

There were times when people were willing to spit at my face to get a bit of money in their pockets.

There were times when teachers made a plan with the students provided by the LC to move to a different location without letting me know, after years of thriving, enjoying my support.

There were many others who also did things of unspeakable nature.

I was betrayed, spat at and stabbed in the back too many times until now, scars of the wounds have become decorations hiding my spine.

Some people can sell their souls in a heartbeat for a little amount even if it means getting the sharpest knife 🔪, sharpening it even further and stabbing the one who supported you the most in the back hoping they won't even know where the attack came from.

Unfortunately though, I always ended up finding out the harsh truth, which has never been easy to take.

Of course, every hero of this true story remains anonymous. The sole purpose of this post is to serve as a reminder of my own failures when it comes to trusting people.


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Useful chunks and collocations from the above essays:


make the switch - o'zgartirmoq, o'zgarishni amalga oshirmoq

highly beneficial - yuqori darajada foydali

increased productivity - kuchaygan maxsuldorlik, yaxshilangan maxsuldorlik

physical and mental health - jismoniy va aqliy sog'lik

incorporate more exercise into a daily routine - kunlik rejaga ko'proq jismoniy mashq kiritmoq

tremendous mental sharpness - yuqori darajadagi aqliy hushyorlik, yuqori darajadagi aqliy o'tkirlik

optimal approach - eng yaxshi uslub, eng yaxshi yondashuv

a virus outbreak - bir virusning to'satdan tarqalib ketishi

contract a virus - bir virusni yuqtirib olmoq

a matter of life and death - hayot-mamot masalasi

minimize unnecessary expenses - keraksiz harajatlarni imkon boricha kamaytirmoq

largely - asosan = mainly, mostly

financial constraints - moliyaviy cheklovlar, moliyaviy qiyinchiliklar



#focusonvocabulary

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CAMBRIDGE IELTS 19, TEST 3, WRITING TASK 2

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?


In today's world, where financial stress and challenges are common, education in money management is extremely important. I completely agree with the presented idea as among many related matters such as investing and saving, the latter plays a vital role in both adults' as well as young people's as it helps us to avoid financial pitfalls and lead a life virtually without such problems.

First of all, saving money brings a lot of advantages to an adult as they do not have to face financial challenges when an unexpected illness hits them or when they are forced to stay indoors without earning including a virus outbreak. We all know that a person can contract an unexpected virus, leaving them extremely ill and unable to commute to work. As a result, that employee might have to provide themselves or even their family members while they recover from the sickness, which can take weeks or even months. Obviously, money that was saved could come in handy in such times as it helps to avoid going into debt, having to apply for a bank credit or any other problem for that matter. Besides that, we are living in a world where various viruses can suddenly outbreak leading to great pandemics. Having sufficient financial means, for obvious reasons, becomes a matter of life and death. In such periods, the habit of collecting money for future days can end up saving your life. So, understanding the value of wealth and saving it can be really beneficial, especially in times of illness or when the mass majority of people have to stop working because of a massive medical emergency.

Secondly, the practice of constantly putting aside some money is extremely useful to the youngest generation as it can help them learn precious lessons of finance through personal experience. For example, if a parent encourages younger members of a family, they could start keeping aside their spare money with a clear purpose in mind. When doing so, they have to keep track of the money that is already collected and how much more is needed so that they can buy a certain product, for example. Clearly, when these young members of a society want to get something expensive, they also have to manage their budget carefully and minimize unnecessary expenses. It goes without saying that the whole process can leave them with more knowledge and experience on money related matters, which is among the most essential skills in today's complex financial world.

In conclusion, the current global situation is filled with people struggling with financial difficulties, largely due to a lack of financial education. Therefore, I believe that saving money for future needs is extremely important for people of all ages. By consistently saving, the current generation can gain valuable financial knowledge, bringing them closer to future financial success, while the older generation can focus on their health and family's well-being without worrying about financial constraints during unexpected illnesses or pandemics.


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CAMBRIDGE IELTS 19, TEST 2, WRITING TASK 2

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?


Whether or not business days in a week should be reduced thereby increasing the length of time for personal relaxation for the working class has been a cause for a lot of debate recently. Clearly, although this change could benefit staff members who may feel more mentally and physically refreshed after a longer period of rest, I believe we are not yet ready to make the switch.

On the one hand, a reduction in the number of work days could be highly beneficial, as it would lead to increased productivity and a better work-life balance. First of all, when employees are given more time as day offs, they can focus more on their physical and mental health. For example, with more time for relaxation, employees can incorporate more exercise into their daily routine, leading to increased efficiency and productivity at work. Secondly, they have a chance to spend more time with their family, improving the relationships, which again causes more happiness and tremendous mental sharpness. All these factors play a crucial role in the eventual performance of the workers at their workplace, increasing productivity immensely.

On the other hand, I believe we have to take several key points into account before making such a huge decision as the current system is not ready for this. First off, if companies around the globe are to make this switch, they have to carry out plenty of research and planning as to decide what might be the most optimal approach to make it happen. For instance, if we were to have a shorter work week starting tomorrow, how much work should be required from each employee? What about the managers? What do we need to do to maintain the same level of profitability after this system modification? Such questions may not have positive answers, and for that reason, most government or private employers are not ready yet.

In conclusion, although a shorter work week may seem appealing and offer numerous benefits, I believe most companies are not ready to make such a drastic change.


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