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☘️ Agree / Disagree

✅ Q: Some people think that the best way to increase road safety is to increase the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

💡 Answer:

Some individuals believe raising the minimum legal age for driving cars or riding motorbikes is the most effective method of increasing road safety. While I accept that this policy is good to some extent, I believe it is not the best because there are much better measures to reduce traffic accidents.

It might be a good idea to increase the minimum age required for driving because of some reasons. Firstly, since younger people are usually less mature and less responsible with their manners, they might not be aware of the importance of following the rules. Therefore, it is reasonable to ban them from travelling on the street to prevent them from breaking the law and causing accidents. Secondly, as older people are more experienced, they can know how to react quickly to handle dangerous situations on the road, while younger ones might not be able to. To illustrate, if the brakes of a car suddenly stop working, a young driver might panic, and accidents are more likely to occur.

However, I would argue that there are much better methods of ensuring road safety. The first one is to have stricter punishments for driving offenders. For example, people who break traffic rules should be required to pay huge fines or be banned permanently from commuting on the street. This makes commuters more likely to respect the law, and traffic accidents can be limited. Another solution is to encourage people to use public transport rather than private vehicles. This can be done by reducing the price and increasing the frequency of buses and tubes to make it more convenient for users.

In conclusion, I believe apart from increasing the legal age for driving, there are more effective ways to make sure that travelling on the street is safe for everyone.

✍️ Total words: 314

📍Band: 7.5+

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☘️ Bar chart

✅ Q: The charts below show the performance of a bus company in terms of punctuality, both actual and target (what actually happened compared to what the company was trying to achieve), and the number of complaints and passengers.

💡 Answer:

The first chart shows the actual and target percentage of buses, from a particular bus company, that arrived at the destination on time, between 1999 and 2003. Meanwhile, the second chart shows how many complaints were made during the same period.

It is clear that while the expected target of buses arriving on time decreased over the years, there was no clear pattern in the percentage of buses that actually arrived on time. Additionally, the number of complaints from their passengers increased throughout the period.

In 1999, the company’s target of buses arriving on time stood at 86%, which was 1% higher than what was actually achieved. Although the target remained unchanged one year later, the percentage of on-time arrivals dropped by nearly 3%. By 2003, this company had reduced its target of on-time arrivals to just over 84%, while the actual figure had witnessed considerable growth to about 85%.

Starting at approximately 7% of total passengers in 1999, the number of complaints made by passengers rose significantly before experiencing a slight decline to just over 8% in 2001. This figure then grew considerably two years later, with about 12% of passengers complaining in the last year.

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​​🔔 What Not to Do!

🔗 Don`t Learn BIG WORDS

I’ve been told by some professors at my university that the more big words you use in your writing and speaking, the higher band score you’ll get. Time invested in learning complicated terms and phrases will pay off you’ll get a good IELTS score and a round of applause from the examiner.

Tempting, isn’t it? But it’s not the best approach.

Using big words and complicated terms don’t show that you have a wide range of vocabulary because they are very difficult to use naturally. Instead of applause, you’re more likely to see the examiner rolling his eyes or squinting in confusion.

I also figured out that the methods I was using to improve my lexical resource -- sorry! -- my vocabulary, were all wrong. I learned this lesson the hard way working with an IELTS expert.

Don’t try to stuff your brain full of words that are as rare and obscure as unicorns. Examiners won’t be impressed. They’ll see right through you and mark you down because your precious big words are unnatural.

The real vocabulary to learn. So, what’s the right way to you improve your vocabulary and sound like a native speaker?

What works for me now is learning vocabulary by topic. For example, if you want to talk about technology, choose words that people often use: gadget, device, innovation, latest, etc. By doing this, not only can you flexibly discuss specific situations but you can also more easily remember the vocabulary list. I'm sure your score will improve a lot and you’ll feel more confident taking the test!

You made a list of vocabulary divided into themes and topics. Good start. But to learn all of them looks like an unscalable mountain. I found a very useful tip on the web about this: You learn/memorize the word first, recite it, then leave it there for some time. After a while, test yourself to see how much you can remember. If you happen to forget something, repeat the process. The amount of information input to your brain will gradually accumulate over time.

But don’t fool yourself! Knowing a word is very different from knowing how to use it naturally and accurately. Don’t just learn verbatim from your vocabulary lists. Try to use them on a daily basis to get familiar with the expressions. Make sure those words will march through your mind and out your mouth even though you’re shaking with fear on the test. Then you are sure to earn that richly deserved standing ovation from the examiner!

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☘️ Two-Part Question

✅ Q: Despite the increased access to education, a significant number of people cannot read or write. What are the disadvantages and what action should the government take?

💡 Answer:

The ability to read and write is considered by many as a basic human right. Nevertheless, all too often, we see that the ability to read and write is not possible for a large proportion of the world's population. This is a serious problem in today's world of the knowledge economy. If we want to ensure growth, we must equip our citizens with the tools they need.

There are many consequences of illiteracy. The most obvious is limited access to information. Reading is the most efficient way to obtain information for personal or professional development and advancement. An illiterate person is unable to reach his or her full potential. The second consequence is a lack of understanding
of the world. Illiterate people have no way to understand the news they hear on the radio or television. The third consequence is reduced self-esteem. An inability to read and write can lead to feelings of inadequacy and low self-esteem. Finally, illiteracy impairs a person's ability to contribute to society. A person who can't
read or write is unable to fully participate in society. A person who lacks the ability to read and write is at a great disadvantage in a literate society.

To solve the problem, governments around the world must take action. The most crucial thing to remember is that there is no one-size-fits-all fix. Each country must come up with its own solutions for the problem. The good news is that there are many potential solutions. One possible solution is to offer more scholarships and financial support for students. Another possible solution is to invest in education. This could include building more schools or providing more training for teachers. The important thing is that governments should act now
to solve the problem.

In conclusion, the inability to read and write is a serious problem. It impairs a person's ability to learn, grow and contribute to society. This is a problem that no country can afford to ignore.

✍️ Total words: 327

📍Band: 6.5+

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