#Day_12 #Overview #Maps
Me: Overall, the park has become more accessible by completely removing the walls and two gates. Additionally, the park is equipped with picnic facilities, allowing visitors to enjoy the nature and meals simultaneously. However, these changes necessitated cutting down flowers and some trees, making it less leafy.
Chat: 8.5
Task Achievement (8.5):
- You clearly mention the removal of walls and gates, the addition of picnic facilities, and the reduction of greenery.
- Focus on significant changes is evident.
Weaknesses:
- "Less leafy" lacks clarity; the decrease in trees/flowers could be stated more explicitly.
Coherence and Cohesion (8.5):
- Well-structured overall, with logical connectors like "Additionally" and "However."
Lexical Resource (8.5):
- Phrases like "necessitated cutting down" and "equipped with picnic facilities" are strong.
- "Enjoy nature and meals simultaneously" is effective.
- However, "leafy" feels slightly informal.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy (8.5):
- Great variety in sentence structures.
- Minor improvement possible in conciseness: "allowing visitors to enjoy the nature and meals" could drop "the" for accuracy.
Revised Overview: β¬οΈ
"Overall, the park has been significantly transformed to enhance accessibility, with the complete removal of walls and gates. It now offers picnic tables and barbecue facilities, creating a more versatile recreational space. However, these changes have come at the expense of greenery, as several flowers and trees were removed, making the park less dense in vegetation."
Me: Overall, the park has become more accessible by completely removing the walls and two gates. Additionally, the park is equipped with picnic facilities, allowing visitors to enjoy the nature and meals simultaneously. However, these changes necessitated cutting down flowers and some trees, making it less leafy.
Chat: 8.5
Task Achievement (8.5):
- You clearly mention the removal of walls and gates, the addition of picnic facilities, and the reduction of greenery.
- Focus on significant changes is evident.
Weaknesses:
- "Less leafy" lacks clarity; the decrease in trees/flowers could be stated more explicitly.
Coherence and Cohesion (8.5):
- Well-structured overall, with logical connectors like "Additionally" and "However."
Lexical Resource (8.5):
- Phrases like "necessitated cutting down" and "equipped with picnic facilities" are strong.
- "Enjoy nature and meals simultaneously" is effective.
- However, "leafy" feels slightly informal.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy (8.5):
- Great variety in sentence structures.
- Minor improvement possible in conciseness: "allowing visitors to enjoy the nature and meals" could drop "the" for accuracy.
Revised Overview: β¬οΈ
"Overall, the park has been significantly transformed to enhance accessibility, with the complete removal of walls and gates. It now offers picnic tables and barbecue facilities, creating a more versatile recreational space. However, these changes have come at the expense of greenery, as several flowers and trees were removed, making the park less dense in vegetation."