#Day_5 #Overview #Static
Me: Overall, the majority of passengers at three of the four airports traveled primarily to visit friends and family, with the exception of Gatwick, where holidaymakers made up the largest share. Heathrow stood out for its relatively higher percentage of business trips compared to other airports.
Chat: Overall, the majority of passengers at three of the four airports primarily traveled to visit friends and family, except for Gatwick, where holidaymakers accounted for the largest proportion. Heathrow recorded the highest percentage of business travelers, making it distinct from the other airports.
Why is this an improvement?
- Uses precise, academic wording!
"Accounted for the largest proportion" β Sounds more precise and formal than "made up the largest share."
"Recorded the highest percentage" β More academic and neutral than "stood out for."
Me: Overall, the majority of passengers at three of the four airports traveled primarily to visit friends and family, with the exception of Gatwick, where holidaymakers made up the largest share. Heathrow stood out for its relatively higher percentage of business trips compared to other airports.
Chat: Overall, the majority of passengers at three of the four airports primarily traveled to visit friends and family, except for Gatwick, where holidaymakers accounted for the largest proportion. Heathrow recorded the highest percentage of business travelers, making it distinct from the other airports.
Why is this an improvement?
- Uses precise, academic wording!
"Accounted for the largest proportion" β Sounds more precise and formal than "made up the largest share."
"Recorded the highest percentage" β More academic and neutral than "stood out for."