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Criteria for Band 7.0:
✅The main parts of the prompt are appropriately addressed.
✅A clear and developed position is presented.
✅Main ideas are extended and supported but there may be a
tendency to over-generalise or there may be a lack of focus and
precision in supporting ideas/material.
Here's why:
✅I addressed all parts of the task by presenting two advantages and two disadvantages.
✅I presented a clear position throughout the response(the reader can clearly see what my opinion is in the intro/body paragraphs and in the conclusion)
❎There is no overgenralization because I tried to hedge(=soften my language) by using modal verbs and adverbs of frequency e.i This can result in - not This will result in, This usually means - not this means. However, there is a lack of precision in my supporting ideas/material.
For example:
The lack of social bonding is another disadvantage. Watching TV or movies with the whole family or a group of friends is regarded as a social event which can help strengthen relationships.
In this argument, I didnt actually explain HOW watching movies can strengthen bonds. I just mentioned the idea and didn't really support it.
Here's what a band 9.0 development would look like:
The lack of social bonding is another disadvantage. Watching TV or movies with the whole family or a group of friends is regarded as a social event which can help strengthen relationships. For instance, families can bond over emotional moments in a film or laugh together during a comedy show, creating lasting memories. Similarly, friends who watch movies together can engage in conversations about their favorite scenes or characters, deepening their connections and fostering a sense of togetherness
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Criteria for Band 7.0:
✅The main parts of the prompt are appropriately addressed.
✅A clear and developed position is presented.
✅Main ideas are extended and supported but there may be a
tendency to over-generalise or there may be a lack of focus and
precision in supporting ideas/material.
Here's why:
✅I addressed all parts of the task by presenting two advantages and two disadvantages.
✅I presented a clear position throughout the response(the reader can clearly see what my opinion is in the intro/body paragraphs and in the conclusion)
❎There is no overgenralization because I tried to hedge(=soften my language) by using modal verbs and adverbs of frequency e.i This can result in - not This will result in, This usually means - not this means. However, there is a lack of precision in my supporting ideas/material.
For example:
The lack of social bonding is another disadvantage. Watching TV or movies with the whole family or a group of friends is regarded as a social event which can help strengthen relationships.
In this argument, I didnt actually explain HOW watching movies can strengthen bonds. I just mentioned the idea and didn't really support it.
Here's what a band 9.0 development would look like:
The lack of social bonding is another disadvantage. Watching TV or movies with the whole family or a group of friends is regarded as a social event which can help strengthen relationships. For instance, families can bond over emotional moments in a film or laugh together during a comedy show, creating lasting memories. Similarly, friends who watch movies together can engage in conversations about their favorite scenes or characters, deepening their connections and fostering a sense of togetherness
#task2
#essay