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Humanity was created to live in a world filled with various choices."
✅ Grammatik jihatdan to‘g‘ri.
Tavsiyanoma: Formal uslub uchun "Humans are destined to live in a world full of choices." yaxshiroq bo‘lishi mumkin.
"Since peoples living contain inherent contradictions, it is only natural for debates and discussions to arise on such matters."
"peoples" noto‘g‘ri, chunki "people" allaqachon ko‘plik.
"living" noto‘g‘ri ishlatilgan, "lives" yaxshiroq.
✅ "Since people's lives contain inherent contradictions, it is only natural for debates and discussions to arise on such matters."
"One of these debatable topic is."
Jumla to‘liq emas va grammatik jihatdan noto‘g‘ri. "One of these debatable topics is whether traveling or reading is the best way to learn about culture." kabi to‘g‘ri tuzish kerak.
"Some people think that travelling is the best way to learn about cultures through books, movies and the internet."
Gap noto‘g‘ri ma’no bildiradi. Chunki "travelling" orqali "books, movies, and the internet" orqali o‘rganish deyilgan.
✅ "Some people think that traveling is the best way to learn about cultures, while others believe that books, movies, and the internet are more effective."
"Well, which of these opinions is justified?"
IELTS uslubida "Well" ishlatish noto‘g‘ri.
✅ "So, which of these views is more justified?"
Body Paragraph 1 (Learning through Travel)
"Firstly, learning about culture through travel is very beneficial becouse people experience it in real life during their journey."
"becouse" noto‘g‘ri → "because"
"during their journey" o‘rniga "firsthand during their travels" yaxshiroq.
✅ "Firstly, learning about culture through travel is highly beneficial because people experience it firsthand during their travels."
"There is a famous saying in our culture ,,Seeing once is better than hearing a thousand times"."
Iqtibosni noto‘g‘ri yozishgan. "Seeing once is better than hearing a thousand times"
✅ "There is a famous saying:
'Seeing once is better than hearing a thousand times.'"
"However, there are many people who have a different opinion on this matter."
✅ Grammatik jihatdan to‘g‘ri.
Body Paragraph 2 (Learning through Books & Internet)
"Just like a coin has two sides, some people approach this issue differently."
✅ Grammatik jihatdan to‘g‘ri.
"From this perspective, people should learn about culture through books has significant benefits."
"people should learn" va "has significant benefits" fe’lning noto‘g‘ri uyg‘unligi.
✅ "From this perspective, learning about culture through books has significant benefits."
"Additionally, learning about culture through books or the internet is financially advantageous."
✅ Grammatik jihatdan to‘g‘ri.
"For example, if on average trip costs around 20 million the same amount of money could be used to buy many books."
"on average trip" noto‘g‘ri → "an average trip"
"20 million" valyuta belgilanmagan. "20 million UZS" yoki "20 million dollars" deb yozish kerak.
Vergul kerak: "For example, if an average trip costs around 20 million, the same amount of money could be used to buy many books."
Conclusion
"In conclusion, one of the most effective ways to learn about culture is through travel."
✅ Grammatik jihatdan to‘g‘ri.
"This is becouse a person gains a much deeper understanding by seeing and experiencing things firsthand rather than just hearing or reading about them."
"becouse" noto‘g‘ri → "because"
"a much deeper understanding" yaxshi, lekin "a deeper and more comprehensive understanding" yaxshiroq.
✅ "This is because a person gains a deeper and more comprehensive understanding by seeing and experiencing things firsthand rather than just hearing or reading about them."
"Therefore, traveling is essential for understanding the traditions, history and lifestyle or different nations."
"or" noto‘g‘ri → "of"
"history and lifestyle of different nations" yaxshi, lekin "history, lifestyle, and traditions of different nations" yaxshiroq.
✅ "Therefore, traveling is essential for understanding the traditions, history, and lifestyle of different nations."