I felt an irresistible urge to share these paragraphs with you even at this unsocial hour:
my version:
Furthermore, as every parent naturally wants the best for their children, placing pressure on them might be seen as a means to ensure children’s prosperous future. This is because without parental supervision and pressure, children might go astray or even develop bad habits due to their curious nature and lack of life experience.
refined version by ChatGPT:
Furthermore, since parents naturally want the best for their children, they may view pressure as a way to secure a prosperous future for them. Without parental guidance and expectations, children might stray off course or develop harmful habits due to their curiosity and lack of life experience.
below are all weak areas of the original paragraph in terms of precision and clarity 👇
my version:
Furthermore, as every parent naturally wants the best for their children, placing pressure on them might be seen as a means to ensure children’s prosperous future. This is because without parental supervision and pressure, children might go astray or even develop bad habits due to their curious nature and lack of life experience.
refined version by ChatGPT:
Furthermore, since parents naturally want the best for their children, they may view pressure as a way to secure a prosperous future for them. Without parental guidance and expectations, children might stray off course or develop harmful habits due to their curiosity and lack of life experience.
below are all weak areas of the original paragraph in terms of precision and clarity 👇